commodoreHUSTLE 02 - Red
Fun cutaways, but these need more of a story or premise - or at least one more interesting than "people trying to get their iPhone or X box replaced" I'm thinking some kind of conflict, that goes over the whole course of the episode (also might help to think in terms of A story, B story). Also the cast of characters might be too big, or maybe just too undifferentiated - very many 24 year old guys who are obsessed with video games, I couldn't keep them straight.
Like last time, it looks terrific, and staggered by the ambition.
Like last time, it looks terrific, and staggered by the ambition.
Lacerta wrote:James is a champ for falling into a lake fully clothed FOR COMEDY. Especially since the actual splash was never shown.
I actually think that makes it funnier. I can't articulate as to why, but the suggestion is somehow funnier than having it spelled out.
I mean, we KNOW hes' going to hit the water. Duh. But it's funnier if we don't see it? I don't know. It is to me, anyway.
Sable wrote:Lacerta wrote:James is a champ for falling into a lake fully clothed FOR COMEDY. Especially since the actual splash was never shown.
I actually think that makes it funnier. I can't articulate as to why, but the suggestion is somehow funnier than having it spelled out.
I mean, we KNOW hes' going to hit the water. Duh. But it's funnier if we don't see it? I don't know. It is to me, anyway.
That's pretty much what we were going for.
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The more I watch Commodore Hustle the more I think this is how life is like for the crew. I wonder what Paul is going to do with the NES and what will happen to Morgan's mattress.
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I like how the tiny reference of Matt shaking his 360 in the first Hustle turned into such a major plot aspect in the 2nd one. Those little bits that carry over to the next are great. I'm wondering if Graham's cowboy hat will do the same...
But maybe it's just there for added ridiculousness. Which is always welcome.
But maybe it's just there for added ridiculousness. Which is always welcome.
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Alja-Markir wrote:I'm still confused about the 10 checkmarks for lost XBoxes...
1 - Dead On Arrival
2 - Water
3 - 10 Foot Drop
4 - Bill
5 - Electrical Surge
6 - Bill
7 - Bill Again
8 - Chili Powder
9 - Laundry
Where is number ten?
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In the LRRWiki "Trivia" section, perhaps? O_O
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Alja-Markir wrote:I'm still confused about the 10 checkmarks for lost XBoxes...
1 - Dead On Arrival
2 - Water
3 - 10 Foot Drop
4 - Bill
5 - Electrical Surge
6 - Bill
7 - Bill Again
8 - Chili Powder
9 - Laundry
Where is number ten?
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I was just about to post this EXACT same list.
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I posted it earlier, but apparently how I phrased it confused Graham.
The only thing in that trivia section are the early hints to the planning of this video, nothing as to what the 10th broken Xbox are, as the one they requested is presumably the one used to film without actually breaking Matt's xbox.
Tim wrote:In the LRRWiki "Trivia" section, perhaps? O_O
The only thing in that trivia section are the early hints to the planning of this video, nothing as to what the 10th broken Xbox are, as the one they requested is presumably the one used to film without actually breaking Matt's xbox.
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I still dont know what Graham keeps trying to mimic... anyone know?
Also Matt's ringtone? Awesome.
@Daniel <-- which is funny since that's my first name: I dont think this really needs a central story. There appears to one developing as the ending of Red shows... Its more or less like scenes from thier day to day life that are... exaggerated?
Also Matt's ringtone? Awesome.
@Daniel <-- which is funny since that's my first name: I dont think this really needs a central story. There appears to one developing as the ending of Red shows... Its more or less like scenes from thier day to day life that are... exaggerated?
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Mercenary wrote:I still dont know what Graham keeps trying to mimic... anyone know?
Also Matt's ringtone? Awesome.
HE HAS AN APPLE. THE IPHONE IS MADE BY APPLE. HE DROPS IT IN WATER. BECAUSE JAMES PUT HIS IPHONE THROUGH THE WASH. WHEN MY IPHONE BREAKS, HE TAUNTS ME WITH THE APPLE. PRESUMABLY BECAUSE HE IS GOING TO DROP IT.
sorry, didn't mean to shout, but this was getting a little ridiculous.
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Matt wrote:Mercenary wrote:I still dont know what Graham keeps trying to mimic... anyone know?
Also Matt's ringtone? Awesome.
HE HAS AN APPLE. THE IPHONE IS MADE BY APPLE. HE DROPS IT IN WATER. BECAUSE JAMES PUT HIS IPHONE THROUGH THE WASH. WHEN MY IPHONE BREAKS, HE TAUNTS ME WITH THE APPLE. PRESUMABLY BECAUSE HE IS GOING TO DROP IT.
sorry, didn't mean to shout, but this was getting a little ridiculous.
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It's okay to shout, Matt. I mean seriously, was it REALLY that hard to figure out then I clued them into that the granny smith had something to do with the iPhones?
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Related to video: One of my minor, minor, VERY minor problems with the first video was that Graham got little character exposition. This has been alleviated. Also: surprising amount of continuity.
Related to video: One of my minor, minor, VERY minor problems with the first video was that Graham got little character exposition. This has been alleviated. Also: surprising amount of continuity.
Matt wrote:Mercenary wrote:I still dont know what Graham keeps trying to mimic... anyone know?
Also Matt's ringtone? Awesome.
HE HAS AN APPLE. THE IPHONE IS MADE BY APPLE. HE DROPS IT IN WATER. BECAUSE JAMES PUT HIS IPHONE THROUGH THE WASH. WHEN MY IPHONE BREAKS, HE TAUNTS ME WITH THE APPLE. PRESUMABLY BECAUSE HE IS GOING TO DROP IT.
sorry, didn't mean to shout, but this was getting a little ridiculous.
-m
Wait, I still don't get it...
J/K Though I never really thought of it that way until I read your post. Then again I only watched it once.
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Master Gunner wrote:I posted it earlier, but apparently how I phrased it confused Graham.Tim wrote:In the LRRWiki "Trivia" section, perhaps? O_O
The only thing in that trivia section are the early hints to the planning of this video, nothing as to what the 10th broken Xbox are, as the one they requested is presumably the one used to film without actually breaking Matt's xbox.
What I was trying to say was that the fact that there are only 9 broken XBoxes listed, while there are ten tick marks, should be added into the Trivia section, as it is clearly either an insiginificant oversight, or a to-be-revealed plot point. O_O
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HUSTLE #2 CAN BE FOUND HERE:
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FOR ALL THOSE UNABLE TO WATCH ON REVVER HERE IS YOUR CHANCE!!
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HUSTLE #2 CAN BE FOUND HERE:
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FOR ALL THOSE UNABLE TO WATCH ON REVVER HERE IS YOUR CHANCE!!
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That was really great
Thought I must say, I think cH1 is better. Probably because I didn't get the apple joke at first though...
Also the "James = Kong Penis" was a reference to the LLR screening, right? I thought it was hilarious yet subtle
Thought I must say, I think cH1 is better. Probably because I didn't get the apple joke at first though...
Also the "James = Kong Penis" was a reference to the LLR screening, right? I thought it was hilarious yet subtle
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Michiel wrote:It seems the apple joke just didn't work for many people. It's not often a LRR joke doesn't work, but this seems to be one.
Personally, I had the feeling it wasn't Grahams joke to begin with. It didn't feel "up to standard", but he tried to make the best of it with his delivery.
Seriously? I thought it was hillarious. As soon as I saw the apple appear I knew it was in referance to the Iphone. Next in line is Graham's Iphone.
It was really too big:
I give you this instead
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