Mad Madam Mimm wrote:Not that I know of. I'm not even sure I'm technically supposed to be sharing the link with you guys, but I wanted to show off
Ha, ha! Got it working now!
First thought: Nice entrance, very good first jokes(I can't unhear you being Merry Poppins now, thanks Mimm.
), I laughed fairly hard. Only note was perhaps slow down the delivery of "Jim Jim Jerrey Mothefucker!" Perhaps letting your body language linger more on the motherfucker comment.
The introduction to the nerd gag, you don't look nerdy. In fact I'd say you were the most attractive woman there, so there's that.
Nice body language recovery on the dick donkeys. Obviously you understand what you did wrong there. Also, "Police" I would have sped up the delivery by about half a second to a second, it
juuust reached the point where it looked like you forgot what you were going to say rather than add to the joke.
Excellent delivery and body language of "Can and
will ban you for life!" sunk the punchline home nicely.
Excellent introduction of the follow up too, even though he was terrible.
Ok, in rewatching that, I really can't fault you too heavily, you did a damned good job. Nice work Mimm, keep it up.