Stuff I Disliked:
Bill and Morgan were a tad stilted in the opening scene.
You can hear the dolly moving in the opening scene.
At 00:53 or 00:54, there's a weird thing with Bill's dialogue. It sound like he says, "He dvanished in a puff of smoke?", but it's accompanied by a slight camera change, which makes me wonder if that was more odd editing than a script slip-up.
Stuff I Thought Was Good: The first CGI smoke effect. It was fine. I mean, it would be cool if it could blend in with the real smoke more, but I realize you guys are lucky to have a smoke machine that good, and we really shouldn't be complaining about special effects. I mean, ever since Jer inflated that bag of popcorn with his mind, we really can't criticize any special effect. That's how cool that popcorn effect was.
Stuff I Thought Was Excellent:
Tally Turning Terry Pratchett Pages
Tally's Apartment Filled With Smoke
Bill and Morgan in every scene but the first one.
I LOVED the security camera effect - very smooth and steady, did not think it was just James
The actual dialogue during the security camera bit - probably my favorite bit of dialogue in the whole thing - "You can still tap your wife, right?"; "I'm going through a tunnel, at my desk, sorry, chshchschshh"
"Getting Things Done", though I didn't notice this without the LRRCast's help.
Matt somehow makes a convincing boss. Like, not just acts it convincingly, but manages to look superior enough to Graham that if I walked by that room, I would automatically assume and accept that Matt was the boss
How Morgan had to gesture at Graham running away from the office, and a quick nod of assent from Bill before giving chase
THE TWIST AT THE END
I really thought that Jer was playing the same guy from Rapidfire Season 2 Episode 1, so it was a great twist making him NOT that guy
THE LAST 20 SECONDS WERE MADE OF EQUAL PARTS WIN AND LULZ (THE GOOD KIND OF LULZ)
So, yeah, besides a shaky beginning, a great video!